My role model
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My role model is RM of BTS. I started to like BTS because they are handsome and perform well. But when I began to watch their videos I fell to RM. For the first, I like to hear him to speacking in English but soon I became to respect his everything. He is already on the top but he always acts humble, and he usually take care of their members. Also he is so smart and he reads book a lot. I think that’s why he is a good lyricist. These reasons are why I choose RM for my role model.
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My role model is RM of BTS.
>>CORRECT
I started to like BTS because they are handsome and perform well.
>>CORRECT
But when I began to watch their videos I fell to RM.
>>CORRECT
For the first, I like to hear him to speacking in English but soon I became to respect his everything.
>> I like to hear him speaking in English which gained a lot of respect from me.
He is already on the top but he always acts humble, and he usually take care of their members.
>> He is already on the top but he\'s still humble and he usually takes care of his fellow members.
Also he is so smart and he reads book a lot.
>> Also, he is so smart and reads books a lot.
I think that’s why he is a good lyricist.
>> CORRECT
These reasons are why I choose RM for my role model.
>> These are the reasons why I chose RM as my role model.
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