My role model
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My role model in my life is BTS. It’s not a reason that I want to be famous like them. They are giving a lot of effects to people in the world in a good way. Some people get courage from them and also their music can make people feeling better. And I respect that they are alsways being humble. That’s why I want to be like them.
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Hi [이름]! We all have role models in our lives that have such a huge role on what kind of person we are today. We look up to them a lot. We gain a lot of lessons as well. It\'s nice that you show them respect that they deserve. May all the things you\'ve learned from him be passed to more generations. :)
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My role model in my life is BTS.
>> My role models in life is BTS not because I want to be famous like them, but because they give good impact to people all over the world.
It’s not a reason that I want to be famous like them. They are giving a lot of effects to people in the world in a good way.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.
Some people get courage from them and also their music can make people feeling better.
>> Some people get courage from them and also their music can make people feel better.
And I respect that they are alsways being humble.
>> I also respect them because they are always humble.
That’s why I want to be like them.
>>CORRECT
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