My rood

2010-08-06 · 첨삭 강사 Shy

학생이 쓴 원문

I live in a studio apartment. That's why there is only one room in my house. It is small but good to live for one person. I am ashamed to tell you that my room is messy. There are lots of stuffs on the floor. Wallpaper is white in color. and there is a desk , a bed , a TV , a closet and a computer. The bed is big enough to sleep for 2 persons. I usually spend my time on the bed watching TV Whenever I get bored watching it, I go to my desk and surf the internet. When I get married, I will move to the bigger apartment.

강사 첨삭

When I get married, I will move to the bigger apartment.---When will this be?haha.^^ Anyway, you have a great place, keep it clean.

-Teacher JM

I live in a studio apartment.

>>>Correct
That's why there is only one room in my house.

>>>Correct
It is small but good to live for one person.

>>>It is small but good it is good for one person to live on.
I am ashamed to tell you that my room is messy.

>>>Correct
There are lots of stuffs on the floor.

>>>Correct
Wallpaper is white in color.

>>>The wallpaper is white in color.
and there is a desk , a bed , a TV , a closet and a computer.

>>>There's also a desk, a bed , a TV , a closet and a computer.
The bed is big enough to sleep for 2 persons.

>>>The bed is big enough to fit for 2 persons.
I usually spend my time on the bed watching TV

>>>Correct
Whenever I get bored watching it, I go to my desk and surf the internet.

>>>Whenever I get bored watching, I go to my desk and surf the internet.
When I get married, I will move to the bigger apartment.

>>>When I get married, I will move to a bigger apartment.

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