my room
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well.. honestly im organized person so i always keep my room clean, i mean cozy. you know clean room makes me feel comfortable so im hustle when i clean up my room. And also my room is haven to me too. because Inside of my room, I have a bed, a wide desk, a comfortable chair, and an air conditioner. there are many equipments in my room, but my favorite equipment is air conditioner. you know our country i mean korea is really really hot this year. so i always keep my room cool with my air conditioner. when i turn on it. air conditioner makes my room like sanctuary
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Hello Robin!
Great! There are some improvements in your sentences but still, take note of your mistakes and memorize the correct patterns. :)
Great! There are some improvements in your sentences but still, take note of your mistakes and memorize the correct patterns. :)
~T. Maine
well.. honestly im organized person so i always keep my room clean, i mean cozy.
>>Well, honestly speaking, I am an organized person so I always keep my room neat and cozy.
you know clean room makes me feel comfortable so im hustle when i clean up my room.
>>You know a clean room makes me feel more comfortable. So I hustle when I clean up my room.
And also my room is haven to me too. because Inside of my room, I have a bed, a wide desk, a comfortable chair, and an air conditioner.
>> In addition, my room is my haven because it has a bed, a wide desk, a comfortable chair, and a well-functioning air conditioner.
there are many equipments in my room, but my favorite equipment is air conditioner.
>>There are many types of equipment in my room but my favorite is the air conditioner.
you know our country i mean korea is really really hot this year.
>>You know, our country is really hot in summer.
so i always keep my room cool with my air conditioner.
>>So I always keep my room cool with the air conditioner.
when i turn on it. air conditioner makes my room like sanctuary
>>When I turn it on, it makes my room like a sanctuary. ^^
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