My school
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello Jun!
Wow! You are really into sports! ^^ Hopefully someday you will get an award as the MVP of all these sports.^^ I revised your sentences. Please review and study the corrections.
Have a great day ahead and take care!
~Teacher Rain~
My school is IST, there is alot of diffrent countries of studets and teachers.
>> DID YOU MEN; My school is IST, many students and teachers came from other countries.
In our school we can do alot of activies, forexample we have vollyballteam, footballteam,basekeball team and badmintun team.
>> In our school, we can do a lot of sports like volleyball, football, basketball and badminton.
OR>> In our school, we can join a lot of sports activities like volleyball, football, basketball and badminton.
I am in all sports team.
>> I joined all these activities.
I am the important persen in my team.
>> I am the most valuable person in my team.
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