My second daughter

2020-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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My second daughter is graduating class. She will has as interview today. There are little job in field of her major. because of corona . She major hotel culinary art. But Corona changed the envirnoment. People like to take trip and to eat out and to play outside and to take a walk. My family are same situation. A lot of food restaurant closed business. There are bad situation in korea about 10 years ago. many people didn`t find job. so they opend restaurant . I will go fishing with my wife and mother. My mother don`t like fishing. but she has been boring. she likes to go outside and to meet friend. This fishing is her second time.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir John. Thank you for this. I hope things will be good for your daughter and she gets employed soon. Good luck!

- T. Beth
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My second daughter is graduating class.

>>> My second daughter is in graduating class.

She will has as interview today.

>>> She will have an interview today.

There are little job in field of her major. because of corona .

>>> There are little job vacancies in her field these days because of corona virus.
She major hotel culinary art. But Corona changed the envirnoment.

>>> She majors in Hotel Culinary Art, but corona virus has changed the situation.

People like to take trip and to eat out and to play outside and to take a walk.

>>> People like to take trip, to eat out, to play outside and to take a walk.

My family are same situation.

>>> My family does too.

>>> OR: So does my family.
A lot of food restaurant closed business.

>>> A lot of food restaurants closed their business.

There are bad situation in korea about 10 years ago.

>>> There was a bad situation in Korea about 10 years ago.

many people didn`t find job.

>>> Many people couldn\'t find a job.

so they opend restaurant .

>>> So they opened their restaurants.
I will go fishing with my wife and mother.

>>> correct

My mother don`t like fishing. but she has been boring.

>>> My mother doesn\'t like fishing but she has been feeling bored.
she likes to go outside and to meet friend.

>>> She likes to go outside and meet friends.
This fishing is her second time.

>>> OR: This would be her second time to go fishing.

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