My second day.

2022-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Annie

학생이 쓴 원문

Hello, I\'m [이름]. I introduced my first day of traveling, Than, Today I Will introduce my second day of treveling. -second day- Our family waked up 7:40 AM. We leave this hotel. That is because We would go to different area second day. That\'s area is. . . . . . JeonJu!!! It is famous HanOak village of JeonJu. We enjoyed second day a lot of fun!!!!

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! It sounds really great that you and your family had a lot of fun during your short vacation. Thanks for sharing. See you later!

~T. Annie

Hello, I\'m [이름].

>>Correct!

I introduced my first day of traveling,

>>Last time, I told you about my first day of trip.
Than, Today I Will introduce my second day of treveling.

>>Today I will tell you about my second day of trip.
-second day-
Our family waked up 7:40 AM.

>>My family and I woke up at 7:40 am.
We leave this hotel.

>>We left the hotel.

That is because We would go to different area second day.

>>We went to another place on the second day.

That\'s area is. . . . . .
JeonJu!!!

>>That place was JeonJu!!
It is famous HanOak village of JeonJu.

>>It is a famous HanOak village of JeonJu.
We enjoyed second day a lot of fun!!!!

>>We enjoyed and had a lot of fun on the second day of trip!!

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