my shopping activity.
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I do internet shopping mainly.
I don't like out of home.
especially in summer, i stay at home.
there are many things i needed in the internet shopping mall.
it's very convenient to me.
but the disadvetage is i can't see any real item.
so, i have receive the item that i didn't mean it.
i am interested in the clothing shopping.
it's a little bit cheeper than other shopping mall.
i live in po-hang where it's very expensive whatever.
because, in here it doesn't connect to other city.
the transportation fee is very expensive.
anyway, as soon as i go to downtown, i can't buy something cheeperly.
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Hello Tracy! I think shopping is the activity that most girls love.Thank you for sharing about your ideas about online shopping. You are a very kind student! I enjoy talking to you everyday! See you in the class! Have a nice day! Love,Verna
I do internet shopping mainly.>> Correct>> I go online shopping (>>better)I don't like out of home.>> I don't like to go out of my home.especially in summer, i stay at home.>>Especially during summer I just stay at home.there are many things i needed in the internet shopping mall.>> Many of the things that I need are in the internet shop.it's very convenient to me.>> It is very convenient for me.but the disadvetage is i can't see any real item.>> But the disadvantage is that I can't see the real item.so, i have receive the item that i didn't mean it.>> So when I receive the item, I am not satisfied because it not what I want.i am interested in the clothing shopping.>> i'm interested in shopping clothes.it's a little bit cheeper than other shopping mall.>> It's a bit cheaper than other shopping mall.i live in po-hang where it's very expensive whatever.>> I live Po-hang where everything is expensive.because, in here it doesn't connect to other city. >> Because it is not connected to other cities.the transportation fee is very expensive.>>Correct ( just start the sentence in capital letter)anyway, as soon as i go to downtown, i can't buy something cheeperly.>> Anyway, as soon as I go downtown, I can't buy things cheaply.
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