My skincare ceremony
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Every morning, I am doing 3 different step of skincare ceremony. First, I deeply clean my skin using a cleansing form and an electronic facial brush. Then, I dry my skin quickly with a dry towel. To hydrate my skin, I put a serum and a hydration cream using an electronic facial massage machine. For the night, I add one more step. During 10 minutes, I put on my face a facial electronic LED mask to keep my skin bright. All these ceremonies are quite time consuming but the beauty of skin is an obsession for most of korean women from teenagers to 70 years old. If I could come back to my teenager period of my life, I will study in medical school to become a dermatological doctor. They are richest people in Korea and earn money easily.
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Good evening Ms. [이름]!
Hahaha, I bet you would be a lovely dermatologist if that\'s the case.
Anyway, thank you!
Every morning, I am doing 3 different step of skincare ceremony.
>>I do a three-step skincare ceremony every morning.
First, I deeply clean my skin using a cleansing form and an electronic facial brush.
>>First, use a cleansing foam and an electronic facial brush to clean the skin deeply.
Then, I dry my skin quickly with a dry towel.
>>CORRECT!
To hydrate my skin, I put a serum and a hydration cream using an electronic facial massage machine.
>>To moisturize my skin, I put on serum and a hydration cream using an electronic facial massage machine.
For the night, I add one more step.
>>In the evening, I add one more step.
During 10 minutes, I put on my face a facial electronic LED mask to keep my skin bright.
>>For 10 minutes, I wore a face electronic LED mask to keep my skin bright.
All these ceremonies are quite time consuming but the beauty of skin is an obsession for most of korean women from teenagers to 70 years old.
>>All of these rituals take a long time, but most Korean women are obsessed with these beauty treatments, from teenagers to the elderly.
If I could come back to my teenager period of my life, I will study in medical school to become a dermatological doctor.
>>If I go back to my teenage years, I will study at a medical school to become a dermatologist.
They are richest people in Korea and earn money easily.
>>They are the richest and make money easily in Korea.
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