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When I was a senior high school student, I got many stress. Because I have no clear purpose, so I don’t know why I have to study hard, and I worried what can I do for a living. For this reason, when I got stress about undecided on my career, I visited Japanese fencing studio. This place is nearby my house, and very familiar space. Because when I was an elementary school student, I started kendo with my friend. So, I had gone Japanese fencing studio everyday for learning how to play the kendo. There, I played the kendo, screamed and perspired heavily.
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Ji hee,
This is interesting. In my place, women aren’t that much interested in combative sports. In Korea, sports like Taekwondo and other forms of combative sports are quite common. I hope to be able to learn one for self-defense and a stress reliever as well but I think I am too old for it. I might break my own bones. Ha-ha-ha! Anyway, what you wrote in here is very interesting.!
XOXO,Jenny
When I was a senior high school student, I got many stress.
>>When I was a senior high school student, I got so many stressors.
>> When I was a senior high school student, I got so much stressed.
Because I have no clear purpose, so I don’t know why I have to study hard, and I worried what can I do for a living.
>>It was because at that time, I had no clear purpose. I didn’t know why I had to study and I worried what I was supposed to do for a living.
For this reason, when I got stress about undecided on my career, I visited Japanese fencing studio.
>> When I got stressed about being indecisive about my career, I visited a Japanese fencing studio.
This place is nearby my house, and very familiar space.
>> It was a very familiar space and it was near my house.
Because when I was an elementary school student, I started kendo with my friend.
>> When I was an elementary school student, I started learning kendo with my friend.
So, I had gone Japanese fencing studio everyday for learning how to play the kendo.
>> So I had been going to the Japanese fencing studio everyday since then and learned Kendo.
There, I played the kendo, screamed and perspired heavily.
>> There through Kendo, I release my stress through screaming and perspiring heavily.
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