My sports day!

2013-05-20 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

학생이 쓴 원문

On Wednesday,my school opens sports day!!! I am a three-legged race's athelte~!! I run fast with my friend~ So, I get a bronze medal~~~~ I feel good~~^^ Next time, I will get a gold medal!!!!!!

강사 첨삭

Hello!
This is so impressive!^^
Congratulations!^^
Like you said, you better get the gold medal in your next sports fest.^^
I am so happy for you!
How about yesterday?
What have you been up to?
Well, you can answer this question in class, if you don\'t mind.
Enjoy your day and I will see you in a while!^^
Take care, winner!!!^^

On Wednesday,my school opens sports day!!!
>>On Wednesday, my school opened a sports fest!
I am a three-legged race\'s athelte~!!

>>Correct!

I run fast with my friend~

>>Correct!

So, I get a bronze medal~~~~

>> I got a bronze medal!

I feel good~~^^

>>Correct!

Next time, I will get a gold medal!!!!!!

>>Correct!

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