My third book
학생이 쓴 원문
I met the leader of publish company last week. The name of the publish is the Minsokwon. The publisher issued 3,000 books since its establishment in 1977. The publisher has primarily published fields of folklore, but now publishes books in various field. The title of my third book which is intended to be issued is 'the deified human' or human is the God. The story is about the Mountain God. And the key point is the difference between the Eastern and Western views of the God. The Eastern is a polytheism, whereas the Western is a monotheism. The Western is originally a polytheism, but the Western had changed monotheism since Christianity dominates the world. The mountain's God is one of many Gods in the Eastern. The book are consists of the concept of the God and the story of deified's human. And the conclusion is that thosewho controls the mountains takes power, thosewho controls the water gains wealth. The mountain is a place to take power from the heaven, at the ancient time.
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름]!
Congratulations on your third book! I just wish I could read it in English since you know I can\'t read Korean. See you in class!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I met the leader of publish company last week.
>> I met the head of a publishing company last week.
The name of the publish is the Minsokwon.
>> The name of the publishing House is the Minsokwon.
The publisher issued 3,000 books since it\'s establishment in 1977.
>> correct!
The publisher has primarily published fields of folklore, but now publishes books in various field.
>> The publisher has primarily published books in the fields of folklore, but now it publishes books in various fields.
The title of my third book which is intended to be issued is \'the deified human\' or human is the God.
>> The title of my third book which is intended to be issued/published this year is \'The Deified Human\' or \'The humanity of God\'.
The story is about the Mountain God.
>> The story is about the mountain gods (of Korea/Asia).
And the key point is the difference between the Eastern and Western views of the God.
>> And the key point is the difference between the Eastern and Western views of God.
The Eastern is a polytheism, whereas the Western is a monotheism.
>> The Eastern is polytheism, whereas the Western is monotheism.
The Western is originally a polytheism, but the Western had changed monotheism since Christianity dominates the world.
>> The Western belief is originally polytheism, but the Western had changed into monotheism since Christianity dominated the world.
The mountain\'s God is one of many Gods in the Eastern.
>> The mountain\'s God is one of many gods from the Eastern.
The book are consists of the concept of the God and the story of deified\'s human.
>> The book consists of the concept of the God and the story of deified human.
And the conclusion is that thosewho controls the mountains takes power, thosewho controls the water gains wealth.
>> And the conclusion is that those who control the mountains takes power, those who controls the water gains wealth.
The mountain is a place to take power from the heaven, at the ancient time.
>> The mountain is a place where you take/receive power from the heaven during the ancient time.
Congratulations on your third book! I just wish I could read it in English since you know I can\'t read Korean. See you in class!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
I met the leader of publish company last week.
>> I met the head of a publishing company last week.
The name of the publish is the Minsokwon.
>> The name of the publishing House is the Minsokwon.
The publisher issued 3,000 books since it\'s establishment in 1977.
>> correct!
The publisher has primarily published fields of folklore, but now publishes books in various field.
>> The publisher has primarily published books in the fields of folklore, but now it publishes books in various fields.
The title of my third book which is intended to be issued is \'the deified human\' or human is the God.
>> The title of my third book which is intended to be issued/published this year is \'The Deified Human\' or \'The humanity of God\'.
The story is about the Mountain God.
>> The story is about the mountain gods (of Korea/Asia).
And the key point is the difference between the Eastern and Western views of the God.
>> And the key point is the difference between the Eastern and Western views of God.
The Eastern is a polytheism, whereas the Western is a monotheism.
>> The Eastern is polytheism, whereas the Western is monotheism.
The Western is originally a polytheism, but the Western had changed monotheism since Christianity dominates the world.
>> The Western belief is originally polytheism, but the Western had changed into monotheism since Christianity dominated the world.
The mountain\'s God is one of many Gods in the Eastern.
>> The mountain\'s God is one of many gods from the Eastern.
The book are consists of the concept of the God and the story of deified\'s human.
>> The book consists of the concept of the God and the story of deified human.
And the conclusion is that thosewho controls the mountains takes power, thosewho controls the water gains wealth.
>> And the conclusion is that those who control the mountains takes power, those who controls the water gains wealth.
The mountain is a place to take power from the heaven, at the ancient time.
>> The mountain is a place where you take/receive power from the heaven during the ancient time.
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