my thought
학생이 쓴 원문
Yeah,of course!!!
I think we should live helping other people.
Maybe beggar and homeless people didn't want to become that.
Just only they became so.
So our city 'PUSAN'must make service center for them.
And help them stand up for their two feet.
강사 첨삭
Hi Ssun!
You are such a kind-hearted person.
I know you are meant to do great things.
I\'ll talk to you later!
~~ Teacher Sharon
Yeah,of course!!!
>> Yes, of course.
I think we should live helping other people.
>> Correct
Maybe beggar and homeless people didn\'t want to become that.
>> I think beggars and homeless people didn\'t choose to be poor.
Just only they became so.
>> It just happened to them.
So our city \'PUSAN\'must make service center for them.
>> I think my city, Busan, must put up service centers for them.
And help them stand up for their two feet.
>> We must help them stand on their own two feet.
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