My thoughts about unifying two Korea.
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conservative polititians think we'd better to maintain current system in more peaceful mood since it will help economy. We don't have to support them really in this system. We just help them a little bit but we don't take the responsibility to take care of them. On the other hand, others think that north koreans are our family and friends. So, that is a enough reason to support them and to unify the whole contury. I think that this opinion is getting weaker since many people who went through the Korean war and left their family in North Korea are getting small portion of Korean popularity. That means young people who don't have any family there don't care about this issue very much.
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Hi [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me. I hope that the controversy between North and South Korea will end to have peace between two nations. Take care! ^_^
conservative polititians think we'd better to maintain current system in more peaceful mood since it will help economy.
>> Conservative politicians think that we have to maintain the current system to help our economy.
We don't have to support them really in this system.
>> We don’t really have to support them in this system.
We just help them a little bit but we don't take the responsibility to take care of them.
>> We can support them but not take the responsibility of it.
On the other hand, others think that north koreans are our family and friends.
>> On the other hand, others think that North Koreans are our family and friends.
So, that is a enough reason to support them and to unify the whole contury.
>> So that is an enough reason to support them and unit with them.
I think that this opinion is getting weaker since many people who went through the Korean war and left their family in North Korea are getting small portion of Korean popularity.
>> I think that this idea is not good since a lot of people who suffered from the Korean war left their family in North Korea and that place is not that popular.
That means young people who don't have any family there don't care about this issue very much.
>> Correct
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