My treatment

2013-08-21 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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I have commuted to another city for my stomach treatment twice a week. It usually takes about two hours to come and go whenever I have my treatment. Since I was young, I have had unhealthy stomach condition. I have tried almost every possible treatment, but the effects of the treatment basically didn't heal my bad stomach. I heard that my mom had thrown up during the whole pregnant period. I guess that's why I am physically weak even if I was born as a normal baby. I also assume that taking pills for a long period of time was another reason. When I visited the hospital that I go on a regular basis, I didn't expect much from it. I don't like my doctor, but the treatment is gradually working. I have to be very cautious about what I eat, but I feel better now. According to my former doctor, my body system is different from others'. We had worked on my diseases so long, every trial turned out to be a failure. Even if he wasn't serious he wanted to report my case to some kinds of academic seminars. I liked and trusted him a lot, but my mom asked me to stop visiting him. Because I am very sensitive and easily resistant to the new medicine at the same time , I realized that it's a high time to try new approach. My mother feels sorry for that she didn't give me a healthy body. However, I totally thought that it's my fault not to take care of myself seriously. Nowadays the thought is changing little by little because I definitely feel some limit no matter how hard I try.

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[이름]! [이름]! [이름]! Whew! I had some time to work on your composition because it is very long. Haha! However, I liked it! I have something to share you \"Your body is precious. It is our vehicle for awakening. Treat it with care.'~Buddha. Our bodies are precious, so why do we neglect them on such basic levels often? A serene mind really is nothing without a healthy body to carry it. So take an hour, yes an hour! Try to be out of your day a few times a week to care for it. Sleep, eat, unwind, rest and get a massage. Wind things down. Pay attention. Show your body the same compassion that you endeavor to show everyone. It needs it much. Say goodbye to an \"unhealthy life\" and say \"hello\" to a healthy life. Take care dear!   -Teacher Chloe I have commuted to another city for my stomach treatment twice a week. >>I commute from my city to another city for my stomach treatment twice a week. >>Twice a week, I commute from my city to another city for my stomach treatment.It usually takes about two hours to come and go whenever I have my treatment. >>It usually takes for about two hours go there.Since I was young, I have had unhealthy stomach condition. >>Since I was young, I have an unhealthy stomach condition. >>I have an unhealthy stomach since I was young. I have tried almost every possible treatment, but the effects of the treatment basically didn\'t heal my bad stomach. >>I have tried almost every possible treatment but they didn\'t work. I heard that my mom had thrown up during the whole pregnant period. >>I heard that my mom have had vomit during her pregnany period of me. I guess that\'s why I am physically weak even if I was born as a normal baby. >>I guess that is the reason why I am not physically fit thought I was born as a normal baby. I also assume that taking pills for a long period of time was another reason. >>Also, I assumed that one of the reasons is taking pills for a long period of time. When I visited the hospital that I go on a regular basis, I didn\'t expect much from it. >>When I first go to the hospital where I have my regular check up, I didn\'t expect much. I don\'t like my doctor, but the treatment is gradually working. >>Correct! I have to be very cautious about what I eat, but I feel better now. >>Correct! >>I have still have to be very cautious about what I eat, but I feel better now. According to my former doctor, my body system is different from others\'. >>According to my former doctor, my body system is different from others. >>According to my previous doctor, my body system is different from others. We had worked on my diseases so long, every trial turned out to be a failure. >>We have worked together for so long to cure my diseases and every trial was a failure. Even if he wasn\'t serious he wanted to report my case to some kinds of academic seminars. >>Correct! I liked and trusted him a lot, but my mom asked me to stop visiting him. >>I liked and trusted him very much but my mom asked me to stop visiting him. >>I liked and trusted him very much but my mom asked me to stop consulting him.  Because I am very sensitive and easily resistant to the new medicine at the same time , I realized that it\'s a high time to try new approach. >>Because I am very sensitive and easily resistant to the new medicine at the same time but I realized that it\'s already the time to try a new treatment. My mother feels sorry for that she didn\'t give me a healthy body. >>My mother feels sorry for my unhealthy body. >>My mother feels sorry for me because I am unhealthy. However, I totally thought that it\'s my fault not to take care of myself seriously. >>However, I thought that is my fault because I don\'t take good care of my body seriously. Nowadays the thought is changing little by little because I definitely feel some limit no matter how hard I try. >>Nowadays, I thought I am getting better little by little but I know there are still limitations no matter how hard I try take care of my health.

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