My unforgettable festival experience
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Of course, I went to concert of Eminem for music festival. During the summer vacation of my second year of high school, I still remember even if I was far away from a stage and alone, we sang almost all the songs together. Also, I won\'t be able to forget that Eminem made a heart above his head.
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Thank you for sharing your most unforgettable experience in a festival, Elic. I was just hoping to see a picture of it. Next time, upload a picture of it. Please review my corrections and study them carefully. Thank you so much! :)
Of course, I went to concert of Eminem for music festival.
Of course, I went to concert of Eminem for music festival.
>> Of course, I went to Eminem\'s concert in a music festival.
During the summer vacation of my second year of high school, I still remember even if I was far away from a stage and alone, we sang almost all the songs together.
>> During the summer vacation of my second year in high school, I still remember that even if I was far away from the stage and alone, the audiences sang almost all the songs together.
Also, I won\'t be able to forget that Eminem made a heart above his head.
>> Correct.
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