My vacation

2020-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I didn\'t have my vacation. I just rested on friday. I worked hard to wednesday for my vacation . but I got a job from my boss at tuesday. so I canced my plan. but on Friday I went to catch fish. I and my wife caught eleven fish. I made sashmi with fish. My skill to make sashmi is growing up good. I could cook 40% sashmi from one fish three month ago. nowaday I made 70% sashmi. I played badminton with wife on sunday. I usually played badminton 1 or 2 hours last years. but I was burned out half hours. My stamina was poor. beside I got a weight . so I was exhausted easily . Beth asked me doctors strike in korea last week. I said reason was selfisness of doctors. if number of doctor is more and more. they maybe lose job and money. Actually local city in korea have few doctors. some city doesn`t have doctor . but doctors that are working on seoule or busan don`t want to go local city. because of money. so Goverment want to make public doctor system.

강사 첨삭

Hello Sir John. Thank you for this. Keep sending them in.

- T. Beth

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I didn\'t have my vacation.

>>> correct

I just rested on Friday.

>>> correct
I worked hard to wednesday for my vacation . but I got a job from my boss at tuesday. so I canced my plan.

>>> I worked hard until Wednesday for my vacation, but I got a job from my boss on Thursday so I canceled my plan.

but on Friday I went to catch fish.

>>> But I went fishing on Friday.

I and my wife caught eleven fish.

>>> OR: My wife and I caught a total of eleven fishes.
I made sashmi with fish.

>>> I made sashimi with the fish.

My skill to make sashmi is growing up good.

>>> My skill in making sashimi is improving.
I could cook 40% sashmi from one fish three month ago.

>>> I could make 40 % of sashimi from one fish three months ago.

nowaday I made 70% sashmi.

>>> Nowadyas, I made 70% of sashimi.
I played badminton with wife on sunday.

>>> I played badminton with my wife on Sunday.

I usually played badminton 1 or 2 hours last years.

>>> I usually played badminton for 1 or 2 hours last year.

but I was burned out half hours.

>>> But I was burnt out in just half an hour.
My stamina was poor.

>>> correct

beside I got a weight . so I was exhausted easily .

>>> In addition, I gained weight so I was exhausted easily.
Beth asked me doctors strike in korea last week.

>>> You asked me about the strikes of doctors in Korea last week.
I said reason was selfisness of doctors.

>>> I said that the reason was the selfishness of doctors.

if number of doctor is more and more. they maybe lose job and money.

>>> If the number of doctor is more, they could lose their job and money.

Actually local city in korea have few doctors.

>>> Actually, the local city in Korea have few doctors.

some city doesn`t have doctor .

>>> Some cities don\'t have doctors.
but doctors that are working on seoule or busan don`t want to go local city. because of money.

>>> But doctors that are working in Seoul or Busan don`t want to go to the local city because of money.

so Goverment want to make public doctor system.

>>> So the government wants to make public doctor system.

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