My vacation

2021-04-16 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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I usually go to the hotel with my family on vacation. I choose a place with a kids cafe and a swimming pool in the hotel. We eat delicious food there and spend time playing with my son. We go there almost on holidays.

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Great job [이름]! keep  writing, it develops a  hidden talent in you :)
~Aki
I usually go to the hotel with my family on vacation. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I usually spend my vacation with my family in a hotel.
I choose a place with a kid\'s cafe and a swimming pool in the hotel.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I make sure that the hotel has a kid\'s cafe and a pool.
We eat delicious food there and spend time playing with my son. 
>> We eat delicious food and spend time playing with our son.
We go there almost on holidays.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We usually go there on holidays.
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