My will
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강사 첨삭
Hi there!! Good answer... You have very interesting viewpoints and ideas...
I have a few corrections though...
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My will to contribute at society
will never make me let go out of this organization or job.
>>My will to
contribute to the society is keeping me from going out of this organization and
my job.
I also lave being expensive with varity people and country.
>>I also love meeting various kinds of people from many different countries.
The work alone motivates me becasue i really enjoy to meet new people, to contact new country.
>> The work alone motivates me because I love meeting foreigners.
Wherever It meet to me I will go.
>> I will go
wherever it leads me.
The all activity of U.N simply
drives me to stay interested in my server.
>> All the UN
activities simply drive me very interested of the service I do.
I expect a lot of areas for keeping peace and supporting poor country in United Nations.
>>I look forward to more activities on peace keeping and supporting poor countries.
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