My wish
학생이 쓴 원문
My wish is buy a iPad.
I want to buy it since elementary school.
However, my parents didn\'t buy it for me.
I really want and need that.
If I have it, I will study, draw pictures and watch videos with iPad.
Thus, I will talk with my parents about buy iPad at christmas again.
I hope my parents would permit.
Then, what is your wish?
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
You did this perfectly.
These are good examples and good sentences.
Great job!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
My wish is buy a iPad.
>> My wish is to buy an iPad.
I want to buy it since elementary school.
I want to buy it since elementary school.
>> I have been dreaming of buying it since elementary school.
However, my parents didn\'t buy it for me.
However, my parents didn\'t buy it for me.
>> However, my parents haven\'t bought it for me.
I really want and need that.
I really want and need that.
>> Correct
If I have it, I will study, draw pictures and watch videos with iPad.
If I have it, I will study, draw pictures and watch videos with iPad.
>> If I have it, I will study, draw pictures and watch videos on my iPad.
Thus, I will talk with my parents about buy iPad at christmas again.
Thus, I will talk with my parents about buy iPad at christmas again.
>> Thus, I will talk with my parents about buying an iPad on Christmas again.
I hope my parents would permit.
I hope my parents would permit.
>> I hope my parents would agree this time.
Then, what is your wish?
Then, what is your wish?
>> How about you? What is your wish?
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