My wish!

2013-04-01 · 첨삭 강사 heidi

학생이 쓴 원문

Today, I have time to think. I have a big wish! I want to be a character designer! I want to be a richer! I want to be smart! I want to slim and pretty! I want to meet good friends~^^ Wow! It's amazing wish! I will achieve these wish in my life. But I'll try to achieve my wish! So I'll study hard and do on a diet. Fighting, Jin young!(Sarah!)^^

강사 첨삭

Hi there Sarah,
You have a lot of things you wish for.

I really hope you can do and have all these wishes.
And I know you will because you work so hard to achieve them. ^^
Take care always.

I\'ll see yah later!

~~T. Heidi_^-^_
Today, I have time to think.

>>Correct!
I have a big wish!

>>Correct!
I want to be a character designer!

>>Correct!
I want to be a richer!

>>I want to be richer.
I want to be smart!

>>Correct!
I want to slim and pretty!

>>I want to be slim and be pretty.
I want to meet good friends~^^

>>Correct!
Wow! It\'s amazing wish!

>>Wow!They are amazing wishes!
I will achieve these wish in my life.
>>I will achieve these wishes in my life.
But I\'ll try to achieve my wish!

>>But I\'ll try to achieve my wishes.
So I\'ll study hard and do on a diet.

>>So I\'ll study hard and diet.
Fighting, Jin young!(Sarah!)^^

>>Correct!

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