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2013-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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my girl friend was sick last week. I was worried about her condition. because she have not been ill that before. I took her to hospital. We arrived hospital late time so the operation time was over. We had only one choice which meaned enroll the emergency room. She filled out some document and someone came to her. When I saw him for the first time, I knew that he is doctor. But he was just resident, which means he was pre-doctor. My girl friend didn't get enough medical service. I was angry with it. But there were so many people who were sick. So I tolerate that. now, her condition is better than that.

강사 첨삭

Hello, there!^^

How are you? Are you feeling great~?

I am so sorry to hear that your girlfriend was sick T^T

Anyways, thanks for sending this in!^^

Keep on writing!^^

Do take good care of her, okay? [I know you will.^^]

Have a great day!^^

my girl friend was sick last week.

>>CORRECT! [capitalization]
I was worried about her condition.

>>CORRECT!
because she have not been ill that before.
>>Because she had not been that ill before.

I took her to hospital.

>>I took her to the hospital.
We arrived hospital late time so the operation time was over.

>>We arrived at the hospital late so the available schedule for operation was over.
We had only one choice which meaned enroll the emergency room.

>>We had only one choice which meant I had to bring her to the emergency room.
She filled out some document and someone came to her.

>>She filled out some documents and someone came to see her.
When I saw him for the first time,
I knew that he is doctor.

>>When I saw him for the first time, I knew he is a doctor.
But he was just resident, which means he was pre-doctor.

>>But he is just a resident, which means he is just a trainee.
My girl friend didn\'t get enough medical service.

>>CORRECT!
I was angry with it.

>>I was angry about it.
But there were so many people who were sick.

>>CORRECT!
So I tolerate that.

>>So that situation was tolerable.
now, her condition is better than that.

>>Now, her condition is better than before.^^

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