My worry about my friend.
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, my essay title is about my best friend.
We have become best friends to each other for 11 years.
So, we don't have things that we don't know about each other.
I already know all her secrets.
In my opinion, my friednd is very pretty and thouhtful.
When i'm very hard or sad, she cheers me up, and listens to my worries. Therefore, when i'm in difficult situation, i always look for her and tell her about my secrets.
Anyway, she is in difficult situation now.
My plan is that when i will go to England, we will go to there together. But, she has one problem nowadays.
Actually, her familly's environment is not good. Especially financial codition. it can make her not to go there.
We think that to go to England is our last opportunity.
I'm really worried about this situation.
강사 첨삭
You have a nice friend.:) I hope that you and your friend would find a solution to your dilemma. I'm sure you'll find a way.
-Here are your corrections
Teacher JM
Today, my essay title is about my best friend.
>>>Today, my essay is about my best friend.
We have become best friends to each other for 11 years.
We have become best friends to each other for 11 years.
>>>We have become best friends for 11 years.
So, we don't have things that we don't know about each other.
So, we don't have things that we don't know about each other.
>>>Correct
I already know all her secrets.
I already know all her secrets.
>>>Correct
In my opinion, my friednd is very pretty and thouhtful.
In my opinion, my friednd is very pretty and thouhtful.
>>>In my opinion, my friend is very pretty and thoughtful.
When i'm very hard or sad, she cheers me up, and listens to my worries.
When i'm very hard or sad, she cheers me up, and listens to my worries.
>>>When i'm having a hard time or when i'm sad, she cheers me up and listens to my worries.
therefore, when i'm in difficult situation, i always look for her and tell her about my secrets.
>>>therefore, when i'm in a difficult situation, i always look for her and tell her about my secrets.
Anyway, she is in difficult situation now.
Anyway, she is in difficult situation now.
>>>Anyway, she is in a difficult situation now.
My plan is that when i will go to England, we will go to there together. But, she has one problem nowadays.
My plan is that when i will go to England, we will go to there together. But, she has one problem nowadays.
>>>My plan is that when i would go to England, we would go there together but she has been having problems nowadays.
Actually, her familly's environment is not good. Especially financial codition. it can make her not to go there.
Actually, her familly's environment is not good. Especially financial codition. it can make her not to go there.
>>>Actually, she's having family problems, especially in financial conditions. She might not be able to go with me in England.
We think that to go to England is our last opportunity.
We think that to go to England is our last opportunity.
>>>We think that going to England is our last opportunity.
I'm really worried about this situation.
I'm really worried about this situation.
>>>Correct
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