My worst experience

2022-04-26 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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When I was a fourteen, I was trainee in some entertainment. I think if I hadn\'t joined that company, my life is little bit different. I don\'t regret it but it was my worst experience in my life. So hard to young girl and very heavy pressure.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ann! 

Oh, sorry if you had to undergo such harsh moments. :( 

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When I was a fourteen, I was trainee in some entertainment.
>> When I was fourteen, I was trainee in some entertainment agency. 

I think if I hadn\'t joined that company, my life is little bit different.
>> I think that if I hadn\'t joined that company, my life would be a bit different. 

I don\'t regret it but it was my worst experience in my life.
>> I don\'t regret it but it was my worst experience in life.

So hard to young girl and very heavy pressure
>> They were so harsh to young girls and give them a lot of pressure. 

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