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Hi [이름],
Thank you for doing your homework. I\'m also interested in visiting Hawaii someday. I\'ve heard great things about the beaches, and I\'d love to relax and soak up the sun. I\'m also interested in learning more about Hawaiian culture and history. I\'m inspired to start planning my own trip to Hawaii!
~Teacher Cathy
I want to go to Hawaii someday.Because I was recommended by people who already visited.
>> I want to go to Hawaii someday because it was recommended to me by people who have already visited the country.
If I go to Hawaii, I want to relax on the beach.
>>CORRECT
OR>> If I decide to visit Hawaii, my main desire is to simply relax and enjoy the beaches.
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