myoung dong
학생이 쓴 원문
Yesterday I went to Myoung dong, with my friend.
I went there by a train, and it took only ten minutes to go there.
We went there, because to see a show named welcome to my world.
All of these situations happened in the Korean air plane.
The story was sort of scary to me because when everybody got out of the airplane, one of the crew died. How it happened was that somebody tied a ribbon aroud her neck, then she died.
Now, in the middle of part, two people tried to find out murder.
And for last they found out who did it.
It wasn't just one person it was everybody.
Actually everybody decided to tie the ribbon, and killed her.
I was scary, but it was fun.
강사 첨삭
Nice to know that you had fun during the weekend. Anyway, here are your corrections: -Teacher JM
Yesterday I went to Myoung dong, with my friend.
>>>Yesterday I went to Myoung dong with my friend.
I went there by a train, and it took only ten minutes to go there.
>>>Correct
We went there, because to see a show named welcome to my world.
>>>We went there to see a show named "welcome to my world."
All of these situations happened in the Korean air plane.
>>>All the scenes happened in a Korean air plane.
The story was sort of scary to me because when everybody got out of the airplane, one of the crew died.
>>>The story was sort of scary for me because when everybody got out of the airplane, I found out that one of the crew died.
How it happened was that somebody tied a ribbon aroud her neck, then she died.
>>>How it happened was that somebody tightly tied a ribbon aroud her neck, then she suffocated.
Now, in the middle of part, two people tried to find out murder.
>>>Now, in the middle part, two people tried to find out about the murder.
And for last they found out who did it.
>>>And on the last part, they found out who did it.
It wasn't just one person it was everybody.
>>>It turns out that it wasn't just one person--- it was everybody on the plane.
Actually everybody decided to tie the ribbon, and killed her.
>>>Everybody actually decided to tie the ribbon and kill her.
I was scary, but it was fun.
>>>It was scary, but it was fun.
Yesterday I went to Myoung dong, with my friend.
>>>Yesterday I went to Myoung dong with my friend.
I went there by a train, and it took only ten minutes to go there.
>>>Correct
We went there, because to see a show named welcome to my world.
>>>We went there to see a show named "welcome to my world."
All of these situations happened in the Korean air plane.
>>>All the scenes happened in a Korean air plane.
The story was sort of scary to me because when everybody got out of the airplane, one of the crew died.
>>>The story was sort of scary for me because when everybody got out of the airplane, I found out that one of the crew died.
How it happened was that somebody tied a ribbon aroud her neck, then she died.
>>>How it happened was that somebody tightly tied a ribbon aroud her neck, then she suffocated.
Now, in the middle of part, two people tried to find out murder.
>>>Now, in the middle part, two people tried to find out about the murder.
And for last they found out who did it.
>>>And on the last part, they found out who did it.
It wasn't just one person it was everybody.
>>>It turns out that it wasn't just one person--- it was everybody on the plane.
Actually everybody decided to tie the ribbon, and killed her.
>>>Everybody actually decided to tie the ribbon and kill her.
I was scary, but it was fun.
>>>It was scary, but it was fun.
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