Natural Disaster: Storm
학생이 쓴 원문
Theme: [ESSAY] Have you ever been in a natural disaster?
Yes. I\'ve been in a storm.
It\'s so windy and foggy. And there are so much rainfalls, too.
When there is a storm, you can do like this:
Refrain from outdoor activities, check the health of the elderly living alone, and respond to strong winds with their families, neighbors, and people around them.
But natural disaster is so scary!
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Here\'s the corrected version of your composition. Catch you in class next week!^^
Cheers,
Jean~~
Theme: [ESSAY] Have you ever been in a natural disaster?
Yes. I\'ve been in a storm.
>> or: I\'ve experienced a storm.
It\'s so windy and foggy. And there are so much rainfalls, too.
>> It was very windy and foggy, and there was so much rainfall, too.
When there is a storm, you can do like this:
Refrain from outdoor activities, check the health of the elderly living alone, and respond to strong winds with their families, neighbors, and people around them.
>> When there is a storm, you can do these things: refrain from outdoor activities, check the health of the elderly living alone, and respond to calls for helps from families, neighbors, and people around you. [I\'m not sure if the last part (\"respond to strong winds with their families, neighbors, and people around them.\") is accurate because I\'m not sure what you meant.]
But natural disaster is so scary!
>> But natural disasters are very scary!
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