nepew\'s 1st birthday party
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My memorable family gathering is My nepew\'s 1st birthday party.
>> My most memorable family gathering was my nephew\'s 1st birthday party.
It was in Seoul and we rent the place to celerblate it.
>> It was in Seoul, and we rented the place to celebrate it.
We took some pictures and had a event that the baby choose one stuff during some items.
>> We took some pictures and had an event where the baby chose one item from a selection.
The stuffs have a each meaning.
>> Each item has its own meaning.
For exemple, Money means became a rich, pen means smart etc...
>> For example, money symbolizes wealth, while a pen represents intelligence.
Of couse many parents want the baby to chose the money.
>> Of course, many parents want the baby to choose the money.
My brother also wanted it so he indueced it and mt nepew choose it.
>> My brother also wanted the baby to choose it, so he influenced him, and my nephew chose it.
It was fun and happiness memory.
>> It was a fun and happy memory.
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