Never satisfied with what we have.

Some people are satisfied with what they have and others are never content with what they have and they always want something more. These days, we are living in a capitalist society in which money is power and money can do everything. You can even buy justice with money. We have seen that many rich businessmen and political leaders avoided the judicial action while a poor man was put behind bars due to just a trivial offense. It is naïve to think that money cannot buy happiness. A lot of surveys and statistics indicate that people feel happiness when they have a certain amount of money. The less money you have, the lower happiness you could feel. That is why we all pursue money and want to have more money. Whether it is right or wrong, we all are obsessed with materialism. The gap between the rich and the poor has been widening. The class divisions have worsened. Who should we blame for the phenomenon? We need to hold ourselves accountable for that

Hello good afternoon Sir [이름]! Thank you for sharing a lot of ideas about the topic. I enjoyed reading your essay. ^^ I do agree with you! There are people who are not satisfied wtih the things they have. ^^ I think we should always be thankful for what we have. Please go over your corrections and if you have any question, feel free to ask me in class. See you later! Teacher Nina   Some people are satisfied with what they have and others are never content with what they have and they always want something more. >> Did you mean: Some people are satisfied with that they have in life while others are never contented with the things they have and they wish for more. >> OR: Some people are satisfied with what they have while others are not and they always want more. These days, we are living in a capitalist society in which money is power and money can do everything. >> These days, we are living in a society that is being ruled by capitalists that makes money powerful. >> OR: We are experiencing capitalism in our society which money makes a person powerful and we can do whatever we want to do. You can even buy justice with money. >> Correct! We have seen that many rich businessmen and political leaders avoided the judicial action while a poor man was put behind bars due to just a trivial offense. >> Correct! >> Better: We have seen that many rich businessmen and political leaders avoided the judicial action while a poor man was put behind bars due to a trivial offense. It is naïve to think that money cannot buy happiness. >> Did you mean: It is naive to think that money can\'t buy happiness. A lot of surveys and statistics indicate that people feel happiness when they have a certain amount of money. >> A lot of surveys and statistics indicate that people feel happy when they have a certain amount of money. >> OR: Many surveys and statistics indicate that money is the key to a person\'s happiness. The less money you have, the lower happiness you could feel. >> Correct! That is why we all pursue money and want to have more money. >> That is why we want to earn a lot of money. Whether it is right or wrong, we all are obsessed with materialism. >> Whether it is right or wrong, we are all materialistic. >> OR: Whether it is right or wrong, we are all obsessed wtih material things. The gap between the rich and the poor has been widening. >> Did you mean: The gap between the rich and the poor is widening. >> OR: The gap and between the rich and the poor is becoming wider. The class divisions have worsened. >> Correct! Who should we blame for the phenomenon? >> Correct! We need to hold ourselves accountable for that >> Did you mean: We need to hold ourselves accountable for it.