New Business.
학생이 쓴 원문
If I have ability .I want to set up place for protecting seniors.
there are many wellfare centers for seniors in korea.
but most of them don\'t use it.
we have to research more for seniors.
especially senior who doesn\'t have money and protector.
some seniors can\'t be protec although they have children.
so govement have to protect them with difference adopting.
강사 첨삭
Good morning, [이름]ny!
Your answers were unexpected. I was thinking like you are going to put up a café or something where people can gather together to have a small talk, but I am impressed with what you have wrote. It seems that you have a heart for the elderly people.
Talk to you later.
Aki~
If I have ability .I want to set up place for protecting seniors.
>>> If I have the ability, I want to set up a place that protects seniors.
there are many wellfare centers for seniors in korea. but most of them don\'t use it.
>>> There are many welfare centers for seniors in Korea, but most of them are not being used.
we have to research more for seniors.especially senior who doesn\'t have money and protector.
>>> We have to search for more seniors especially those who don\'t have money and an insurance
some seniors can\'t be protec although they have children.
>>> Some seniors don\'t have insurance although they have children.
so govement have to protect them with difference adopting.
>>> So the government has to protect them in various ways that is adaptable for them.
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