New hobbies
학생이 쓴 원문
If you would have a new hobby, what would it be and why?
I want to learn new sports like soccer or netball which is similar to basketball. 3 years ago I learned soccer but just one month. I want to learn more and practice skills. In my neighborhood, there is a soccer club for women. I forgot a long time but occur now. I will search soccer club after writing.
I also want to learn vocalization and composition. In the future, I want to make and sing music. It is my last dream I think. I want to get many new hobbies and enjoy them.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
Thank you for submitting your answer to me.
I was impressed and touched by your answer.
I hope that you will be able to try these new things and enjoy them.
There are times when people would hesitate to try something new because of fear and I\'m glad that you don\'t see new things that way.
I\'m happy that you are looking at things in positive light. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> CORRECT.
3 years ago I learned soccer but just one month.
>> 3 years ago, I learned soccer but just for one month.
I want to learn more and practice skills.
>> CORRECT.
In my neighborhood, there is a soccer club for women.
>> CORRECT.
I forgot a long time but occur now.
>> I forgot about it for a long time but it occurred to my mind now.
I will search soccer club after writing.
>> I will search the soccer club after writing.
I also want to learn vocalization and composition.
I also want to learn vocalization and composition.
>> CORRECT.
In the future, I want to make and sing music.
>> CORRECT.
It is my last dream I think. I want to get many new hobbies and enjoy them.
>> CORRECT.
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