New thing

2025-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

Do you know S board (not skiboard)? This was known S shape and left foot and right foot used to make bounce. It is different previous board shape and how to use . Who made it? Homeless developed it of new thing Everthing has been start to creativity all of department .

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Do you know S board (not skiboard)?
REVISED: Do you know the S Board? (Not the ski board.)

This was known S shape and left foot and right foot used to make bounce.
REVISED: It\'s known for its S-shaped design and the way it uses both the left and right foot to create a bouncing motion.

It is different previous board shape and how to use .
REVISED: It\'s different from previous board designs, both in shape and in how it\'s used.

Who made it?
Homeless developed it of new thing
REVISED: Who created it? It was actually developed by a homeless person — a new invention born out of creativity.

Everthing has been start to creativity all of department .
REVISED: Everything starts from creativity, in every field.

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