New year 1
학생이 쓴 원문
There are two big holiday in Korea. One is Korean New year, the other is Korean thanks giving day.
I'll give you some informations about Korean New year.
In New year, We go to the hometown and spend time with family. and we bow to the parents or grand-parents, which wish them live long and make fortune. and the parent give the children some money and good comment.
The special food for new year is rice cake soup. we conder eating rice cake soup in new year getting one year old. So all the family gather and eat rice cake soup.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
I have heard that New Year and Chusok are two of the biggest holidays in Korea. During this time, traffic jam is also a big problem because people are rushing to go home.
Anyway, I think you have to practice more on writing. I can see that your biggest strength is speaking and on this area, you have a lot of potentials so we have to develop it more..
See you in class!!
T. Shy
There are two big holiday in Korea. One is Korean New year, the other is Korean thanks giving day.>> There are two big holidays in Korea. One is Korean New Year, the other is Korean thanks giving day.
I'll give you some informations about Korean New year.>> I'll give you some information about Korean New year.
In New year, We go to the hometown and spend time with family. and we bow to the parents or grand-parents, which wish them live long and make fortune. and the parent give the children some money and good comment.>> On New Year’s Day, we go to our hometown and spend time with family. We bow down to our parents or grandparents. We wish them long life and good fortune. And then the parents give the children some money and good comments.
we conder eating rice cake soup in new year getting one year old.
>> We consider eating rice cake soup in New Year a tradition to become a year older.
So all the family gather and eat rice cake soup.
>> So all the families gather and eat rice cake soup.
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