New Year performance
학생이 쓴 원문
Many visitors like Seoul because it harmonize itself between the radiation and the modern. We Koreans don\'t think that popular K-pop groups\' performances distract the traditional things. Rather, their performance has nuanced contrast and beautiful harmony similar to contrasting colors. Also through their performance, we are making our city more international one. We want many other countries to know our beautiful Seoul.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
Thank you for taking the time to finish your homework. I agree with you! Diversity is indeed necessary if we want to promote one\'s culture and traditions. Nowadays, not only in art but also in food, that\'s why we have fusion dishes.
- T. Caitlyn
Many visitors like Seoul because it harmonize itself between the radiation and the modern.
>> Many visitors like Seoul because it harmonizes itself between tradition and modernity.
We Koreans don\'t think that popular K-pop groups\' performances distract the traditional things.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: Koreans, including me, don\'t believe that performances by popular K-pop groups distract from traditional elements.
Rather, their performance has nuanced contrast and beautiful harmony similar to contrasting colors.
>> Instead, their performances offer nuanced contrast and beautiful harmony, much like contrasting colors.
Also through their performance, we are making our city more international one.
>> Through their performances, we are also making our city more international.
We want many other countries to know our beautiful Seoul.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: We want many other countries to discover the beauty of Seoul.
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