New year2
학생이 쓴 원문
When all the family gather, we play a game. we call it Yut-game, sort of board game. Yut are four sticks. there is head and tail on a stick. we throw them in the air. and use is like a dice in the board game.
Korean New year is very big holiday. Millions of people move to thier hometown to meet family. Even if there is a horrible traffic jam all over the country, we happliy go to hometown to share the happiest moment with family who they love anyone else in the world.
강사 첨삭
Hello again!
The same thing is true with us here in the Philippines.
No matter how far our home town is, we make it a point to go home on a special occasion.
There is no place like home..
T. Shy
When all the family gather, we play a game, we play a game
>> When all the family gathers, we play a game, we play a game.
Yut are four sticks
>> Yut is consisting of four sticks.
there is head and tail on a stick
>> There is head and tail on a stick
we throw them in the air. and use is like a dice in the board game.>> We throw them in the air and use it like a dice in the board game.
Korean New year is very big holiday.
>> Korean New year is a very big holiday.
Millions of people move to thier hometown to meet family.
>> Millions of people move to their hometown to meet their family.
Even if there is a horrible traffic jam all over the country, we happliy go to hometown to share the happiest moment with family who they love anyone else in the world.
>> Even if there is a horrible traffic jam all over the country, we happily go to our hometown to share the happiest moment with our family whom we love above anyone else in the world.
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