News

2017-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

학생이 쓴 원문

This news is US House Republicans have unveiled a long-awaited plan to replace the law of Obamacare and it cause many problems such as replacing income-based subsidies,driving up the costs of healthcare by 30%.The bottom line is that the replacement plan will make some people who pay health insurance have the rug pulled out from under them and to pay more premiums. 1.Obama was impressed by the healthcare insurance policy of South Korea which can give many people the chances to have good benefits at a low price,which serve as a momentum to make Obamacare.If I go to hospital,hospital bills will be expensive but I pay little medical fee because I obligatory premiums which include in my tax. 2.I think many people who can't afford to pay premiums don't get medical service because the new plan force Americans to pay more. 3.I believe Obamacare has good intentions,but it seems to need more time to familiar to the policy and to understand why this kind of policy is needed to its own people.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


Yes, I do agree with you.

I think this policy was adapted from your country.

I guess, the policy in your country is better.

In America, I think it\'s unfair to some people.

It\'s nice if other countries will have a Healthcare system like yours.

Have a good night!


_Teacher Dianne ^^


This news is US House Republicans have unveiled a long-awaited plan to replace the law of Obamacare and it cause many problems such as replacing income-based subsidies,driving up the costs of healthcare by 30%.

>> This news is about the US House Republicans that have unveiled a long-awaited plan to replace the law of Obamacare and it caused many problems such as replacing the income-based subsidies, driving up the cost of healthcare by 30%.


The bottom line is that the replacement plan will make some people who pay health insurance have the rug pulled out from under them and to pay more premiums.

>> correct


 1.Obama was impressed by the healthcare insurance policy of South Korea which can give many people the chances to have good benefits at a low price,which serve as a momentum to make Obamacare.If I go to hospital,hospital bills will be expensive but I pay little medical fee because I obligatory premiums which include in my tax.

>> Obama was impressed by the healthcare insurance policy of South Korea which can give many people the chances to have good benefits at a low price and that served as a momentum to make Obamacare. If I go to a hospital, the hospital bill or the medical fee will be expensive, but I pay only a little because of the obligatory premium which is deducted or included in my tax.


 2.I think many people who can\'t afford to pay premiums don\'t get medical service because the new plan force Americans to pay more.

>> I think many people who can\'t afford to pay premiums don\'t get a good medical service because the new plan force Americans to pay more.


 3.I believe Obamacare has good intentions,but it seems to need more time to familiar to the policy and to understand why this kind of policy is needed to its own people.

>> I believe Obamacare has good intentions, but it seems to need more time to familiarize the policy and to understand why this kind of policy or insurance is needed by the people.

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·