news about japan.

2011-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 lei

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Nowadays people worried about japan as much as they can. I never think about that those disasters happened. fierst earthquake what is worse is nuclear explosion. That news updated everytime when there were something wrong. And Its influences appered all around the world. They worried about people who live in japan especially chlidren. We already knew truth about effect of nuclear od explosion through Russia. They still suffered side effect of explosion. Some critisized people who create some standards If we establish factory of nuclear. I agree with their opinion just small parts. But.. And The effects of economy are going to be serious. We started organized people who can help japan if they have time or some started donateing money for them. I hope it never again that kind of tragedies.

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[이름], thanks for dropping by. Kindly check on the corrections that I made and be very careful not to make same mistakes everytime. Have a great day!!! J   Nowadays people worried about japan as much as they can. >>Nowadays, people worry about what happened in Japan. I never think about that those disasters happened. F >>I never thought that these disasters will happen. ierst earthquake what is worse is nuclear explosion. >>First is the earthquake, and what is worse is the nuclear explosion. That news updated everytime when there were something wrong. >>The news was updated whenever something bad happens. And Its influences appered all around the world. >>And it's affects were known around the world. They worried about people who live in japan especially chlidren. >>They worry about the people who live in Japan especially the children. We already knew truth about effect of nuclear od explosion through Russia. >>We already know the effect of nuclear radiation since it happened before in Russia. They still suffered side effect of explosion. >>They suffered a lot due to the side effect of the explosion. Some critisized people who create some standards If we establish factory of nuclear. >>Some people criticized who created these standards when they establish the nuclear plant. I agree with their opinion just small parts. >>I somewhat agree to their opinion. But.. And The effects of economy are going to be serious. >>But these have serious effects on the economy. We started organized people who can help japan if they have time or some started donateing money for them. >>We started to organize people who like to help Japan if they have time and some already donated money. I hope it never again that kind of tragedies. >>I hope that these tragedies will never happen again.

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