Ninth homework

2018-06-12 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Oh! so much interesting topic! I am happy only to think about it. There are four my bucket lists for me. The first thing I want to do is mastering speaking in English. I do want to speak fluently in English and I have dreamed this for 5 years. After then, I'd like to teach an elementary school students conversation in English. The second thing is getting my home in seoul. I want to live happily my family there for a long time. To do this, I have to earn hard money. The third is to go eating tour. I love eating so much that I got stomach sick many times but I don't give up eating. I'm going to travel to eat food that is famous the area all my country. My final bucket list is driving super car. With a car window open and in the wind, I'd like to run a wide road. It's so amazing! But in fact. I don't have driver's licence however I will get it to drive someday.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]!
Wow! You sure have great things on your bucket list. These things are actually doable so I wish you luck with everything and hope that you\'ll be able to do everything very soon!
~T. Lynn
Oh! so much interesting topic!
>> correct!
I am happy only to think about it.
>> I\'m happy just thinking about it.
There are four my bucket lists for me.
>> There are four in my bucket list.
The first thing I want to do is mastering speaking in English.
>> correct!
I do want to speak fluently in English and I have dreamed this for 5 years.
>> correct!
After then, I\'d like to teach an elementary school students conversation in English.
>> After that, I\'d like to teach elementary school students English conversation.
The second thing is getting my home in Seoul.
>> correct!
OR>> the second thing is to own a house/an apartment in Seoul.
I want to live happily my family there for a long time.
>> I want to live happily with my family there for a long time.
To do this, I have to earn hard money.
>> To do this, I have to work hard to earn enough money.
The third is to go eating tour.
>> The third is to go on an eating/food tour.
I love eating so much that I got stomach sick many times but I don\'t give up eating.
>> correct!
I\'m going to travel to eat food that is famous the area all my country.
>> I\'m going to travel to eat food which are famous in each region in our country.
My final bucket list is driving super car.
>> Finally, I\'d like to drive a super car.
With a car window open and in the wind, I\'d like to run a wide road.
>> With the car windows open, I could feel the wind while driving on an open road.
It\'s so amazing!
>> That would be so amazing!
But in fact. I don\'t have driver\'s license however I will get it to drive someday.
>> But the thing is I don\'t have a driver\'s license yet.  However, I will get it someday so that I\'ll be able to fulfill my wish on my bucket list.

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