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I know someone who was forced to retire early from our company.
It was 2 years ago.
His name is Jae yong Joo.
Since he was really nice and kind , most of people liked him but
his boss.
When he had some complain on our company,
he just expressed his thought without any hesitation.
That's why his boss got to hate him.
One day, hr department guy called him and told him to leave our company.
He moved to other company which is one of our subsidiary companies.
I met him a couple of months after his retirement.
He seemed happy.
But one misfotune follwed another.
One day I heard the news he got a incurable disease.
After few days, he passed away.
I am not sure but lots of stresses from early retirement might
affect his health.
강사 첨삭
Hello there my dear [이름],:)
Its nice to know that despite of the surgery that you had before, you are still very good, keep up the good work!
Talk to you later my dear..
T.Cam
I know someone who was forced to retire early from our company.>>correct!
It was 2 years ago.
>.correct!
His name is Jae yong Joo.
>>correct!
Since he was really nice and kind , most of people liked him but
his boss.
>>correct!
When he had some complain on our company,
he just expressed his thought without any hesitation.
>>correct!
That's why his boss got to hate him.
>>correct!
One day, hr department guy called him and told him to leave our company.
>>correct!
He moved to other company which is one of our subsidiary companies.
>>correct!
I met him a couple of months after his retirement.
>>correct!
He seemed happy.
>>He seemed to be very happy.
But one misfotune follwed another.
>>correct!
One day I heard the news he got a incurable disease.
>>correct!
After few days, he passed away.
>>correct!
I am not sure but lots of stresses from early retirement might affect his health.
>>correct!
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