Not important because of its origin
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, Halloween is not important. And it\'s not a good thing. Do you know its origin? The origin is awful. The tribe called celt in island, it gave a person to their god for the person who died. I think that give person to god for offering is wrong. The tribe wandered with black clothes and made other tribe offer woman to give god forcefully. If the other tribe don\'t agree, Celt made fire all over the other tribe\'s village. Because of this origin, it became the best holiday to like a group called Illuminati. However, lots of people don\'t know the origin of Halloween.(me too before find information) In conclusion, I think it is not good day.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Daniel! You did an awesome job. You researched about the origin of Halloween to support your opinion. Amazing! Keep it up!
- Teacher Debbie
>> This is a good sentence.
And it\'s not a good thing.
>> Moreover, it\'s not a good thing.
Do you know its origin?
>> This is a good sentence.
The origin is awful.
>> This is a good sentence.
The tribe called celt in island, it gave a person to their god for the person who died.
>> An island tribe called Celt sacrificed a person to their god.
I think that give person to god for offering is wrong.
>> I think sacrificing a person to a god is wrong.
The tribe wandered with black clothes and made other tribe offer woman to give god forcefully.
>> The tribe wandered with black clothes and made other tribes offer women to their god.
If the other tribe don\'t agree, Celt made fire all over the other tribe\'s village.
>> When the other tribes didn\'t agree, the Celt burned the other tribes\' villages.
Because of this origin, it became the best holiday to like a group called Illuminati.
>> Because of this origin, it became the best holiday for a group called Illuminati.
However, lots of people don\'t know the origin of Halloween.(me too before find information)
>> However, lots of people don\'t know the origin of Halloween. I didn\'t know about it, too.
In conclusion, I think it is not good day.
>> In conclusion, it is not a good day.
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