Notice of promotion
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Today, my company noticed promotion. Because I was promoted lastyear, I'll wait for 2 years to promote.so, I'm not intrest in it. However, some collleagues are promoted or failed. Especially, my senior officer who wasn't promoted to director failed again today. I have been working with him over 5 years. I like him as my senior officer. so I feel very sorry for him,
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HI there [이름]!
It's nice to know that after two years, you can be a candidate for a promotion in your company. I'm happy that you were promoted last year- Keep giving your best in your job!
I feel sorry about your senior officer's situation, too. Maybe, it's not yet his time.
Keep this quote in mind:
In order to succeed you must fail, so that you know what not to do next time.
Anthony J. D'Angelo
Have a great day ahead!
T. Joey
Anyway, here are my corrections:
Today, my company noticed promotion.
>>> There was a notice for promotion in my office today.
Because I was promoted lastyear, I'll wait for 2 years to promote.
>>> I was promoted last year, so I'll wait for another two years to be promoted again.
so, I'm not intrest in it.
>>> That's why I'm not so interested in it.
However, some collleagues are promoted or failed.
>>> But some of my colleagues were promoted and some were not.
Especially, my senior officer who wasn't promoted to director failed again today.
>>> Like my senior officer who was not promoted as a director, he failed again.
I have been working with him over 5 years.
>>> I have been working with him for 5 years.
I like him as my senior officer. so I feel very sorry for him,
>>> Correct!
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