Nov.04.2011.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think, if it came easily something, this saying.
It disappears easily.
But always occur unexpected something.
I always believe this saying.
It doesn't betry the effort.
But i felt so many while i live experienced.
I guess, everything who made.
If evolution theory was right.
We'll make a new thing.
But it doesn't make. i guess carefully. it doesn't be right.
I often think.
Which planet manage our the earth.
I imagine when i was young.
But my theory destroyed about a movie.
The movie is Matrix.
I saw the Matrix. i was surprised.
It exists like me on the earth.
Anyway,i like reading books.
My father always said.
My son,
You don't care studying but read books.
These books, you'll make a new person.
I don't know about the reason.
But i become a adult. i realized that meaning.
But it can't told you.
It doesn't help you from every books.
So maybe Exist old saying and parents saying.
Anyway,It's friday.
강사 첨삭
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-T.Verna-
I think, if it came easily something, this saying.
>> I am thinking if it came easily like this saying.It disappears easily.>>CorrectBut always occur unexpected something.>>But something occurs unexpectedly.I always believe in this saying.
>>CorrectIt doesn\'t betray the effort.>>CorrectBut i felt so many while i live experienced.
>>But I can feel many emotions while I live.I guess, everything who made .>>I guess everything is made.If evolution theory was right,
>>CorrectWe\'ll make a new thing.>>We\'ll make new things.But it doesn\'t make. i guess carefully. it doesn\'t be right.>> But is foesn\'t make new things. I guess carefully but it\'s not always right.I often think.Which planet manage our the earth.
>>I often think who manages the Earth.I imagine when i was young.
>> I imagined that when I was young.But my theory destroyed about a movie.>>But my theory was destoyed by a movie.The movie is Matrix.
>>The movie was MatrixI saw the Matrix. i was surprised.>>When I saw Matrix, I was surprised.Anyway, I like reading books.
>>CorrectMy father always said.My son,You don\'t care studying but read books.
>>My father always say \" My son, don\'t care about studying just read books.\"These books, you\'ll make a new person.>>Because of these books you can make a new person.I don\'t know about the reason.
>>CorrectBut i become a adult. i realized that meaning.>>CorrectBut it can\'t told you.
>>But it can\'t tell you.It doesn\'t help you from every books.>>Not every books will help you.
Anyway, it\'s Friday.
>>Correct
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