Nov.04.2011.

2011-11-04 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

학생이 쓴 원문

I think, if it came easily something, this saying. It disappears easily. But always occur unexpected something. I always believe this saying. It doesn't betry the effort. But i felt so many while i live experienced. I guess, everything who made. If evolution theory was right. We'll make a new thing. But it doesn't make. i guess carefully. it doesn't be right. I often think. Which planet manage our the earth. I imagine when i was young. But my theory destroyed about a movie. The movie is Matrix. I saw the Matrix. i was surprised. It exists like me on the earth. Anyway,i like reading books. My father always said. My son, You don't care studying but read books. These books, you'll make a new person. I don't know about the reason. But i become a adult. i realized that meaning. But it can't told you. It doesn't help you from every books. So maybe Exist old saying and parents saying. Anyway,It's friday.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],        Thank you for this compostion.Great job! Continue with your diligence. I know because of it you will be a great English speaker in the future. See you later! -T.Verna-   I think, if it came easily something, this saying. >> I am thinking if it came easily like this saying.It disappears easily.>>CorrectBut always occur unexpected something.>>But something occurs unexpectedly.I always believe in this saying. >>CorrectIt doesn\'t betray the effort.>>CorrectBut i felt so many while i live experienced. >>But I can feel many emotions while I live.I guess, everything who made .>>I guess everything is made.If evolution theory was right, >>CorrectWe\'ll make a new thing.>>We\'ll make new things.But it doesn\'t make. i guess carefully. it doesn\'t be right.>> But is foesn\'t make new things. I guess carefully but it\'s not always right.I often think.Which planet manage our the earth. >>I often think who manages the Earth.I imagine when i was young. >> I imagined that when I was young.But my theory destroyed about a movie.>>But my theory was destoyed by a movie.The movie is Matrix. >>The movie was MatrixI saw the Matrix. i was surprised.>>When I saw Matrix, I was surprised.Anyway, I like reading books. >>CorrectMy father always said.My son,You don\'t care studying but read books. >>My father always say \" My son, don\'t care about studying just read books.\"These books, you\'ll make a new person.>>Because of these books you can make a new person.I don\'t know about the reason. >>CorrectBut i become a adult. i realized that meaning.>>CorrectBut it can\'t told you. >>But it can\'t tell you.It doesn\'t help you from every books.>>Not every books will help you. Anyway, it\'s Friday. >>Correct

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