NOV.07.2011.
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi. What did you do on the weekend?
I guess, you went to The church with your husband.
And took a rest.
I spent all time at home with my family.
Becuase my brother held a birthday.
My family doesn't care for birthday.
We just ate Traditional koean's foods.
Representative Mi Yug soup.
We can't tell birthday without the food,
I tried to persuade someone as i know in the future.
But i realized. i feel satification when i claim.
They agreed in front of me, But i heard their slander not much later.
I just taught to be helpful to them.
But these issues returned to me and harassed me.
I thought. Humen dont easily accept the other subjective thinking.
so They don't like a difference thinking between individual and individual.
I concluded. don't tell. and if those who had some mistakes.
Endure and Wait.until they can undersantd,
Korea's saying.
Patience is bitter. Fruit is sweet.
Sometime they understand their thinkings..
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름],
Thank you once again for your composition. You are right about my weekend. That\'s how I usually spend my weekend. I didn\'t enjoy much though because it was a drizzling in our country. Have a great day ahead! See you later!
-Verna-
Hi. What did you do on the weekend?
>>CorrectI guess, you went to the church with your husband.
>>CorrectAnd took a rest.>>CorrectI spent all time at home with my family.
>>CorrectBecuase my brother held a birthday.>>Because my brother celebrated his birthdayMy family doesn\'t care for birthday.
>>My family doesn\'t care about birthdays.We just ate Traditional koean\'s foods.>>We just ate traditional Korean foods.Representative Mi Yug soup.>>CorrectWe can\'t tell birthday without the food,>>We can\'t say it is a birthday if there is no food.I tried to persuade someone as i know in the future.>>I will try persuade someone I know in the future.But i realized. i feel satification when i claim.
>>But I realized, I\'ll feel satisfied when I will pursue it.They agreed in front of me, But i heard their slander not much later.>> They agreed in front of me, but I heard they slander much later.I just taught to be helpful to them.
>>I just thought of helping them.But these issues returned to me and harassed me.>>CorrectI thought.
>>I just thought about it.
Humen dont easily accept the other subjective thinking.
>>Humans don\'t easily accept other subjective thinking.so They don\'t like a difference thinking between individual and individual.>>So, don\'t like to accept the diffence between individual to individual.I concluded. don\'t tell. and if those who had some mistakes.
>>I concluded that we should not tell those people who make mistakes.Endure and Wait.until they can undersantd,>>Endure and wait until they can understand.Korea\'s saying.Patience is bitter. Fruit is sweet.>>Thewre is a Korean saying which goes like \" Patience is bitter, but the fruit is sweet.\"Sometime they understand their thinkings..
>>Sometimes, they don\'t understand what they think.
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