Nov.10.2011.

2011-11-10 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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I have heard several defectors about the issue. But I guess It might be turn or error. We have more caution to decide. And We have to take more objective decisions. Don't easily decide one's side. I was born in South Korea, and I'm South Korean but I don't like my nation. Absolutely,It's very convenience to live in South Korea and we have good Public Order. You can know them if you could come in here. But The Weaknesses of Koreans are Greed and Success for living mostly. We fight each other to win since kindergarten( 4~7) in competition. And we become elementary schoolchild. fight, win, achieve. trample. I have educated them in Korea's teachers. We must win, have to eliminate, should trample. Always Learned at school. I didn't know that i had done them and it's the ture i believed until 26. It's sad stories but exactly it's reality in Korea. so I don't like Korea's Education System. I went to school and finished military service. I'm 26 years old.

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Hi [이름],        Thank you for your bravery to discuss this matter about Korea. I think most people  tackle the good things about your country but you laid the other side of the coin. This is real education seeing things without limit. Keep up the good job! -Verna- I have heard several defectors about the issue. >>CorrectBut I guess It might be turn or error.>>But I guess it might turn to error.We have more caution to decide. >>CorrectAnd we have to take more objective decisions.>>CorrectDon\'t easily decide on one\'s side.>>CorrectI was born in South Korea, and I\'m South Korean but I don\'t like my nation. >>CorrectAbsolutely, it\'s very convenience to live in South Korea and we have good Public Order.>>It is absolutely very convenient to live in South Korea and we have good public order.You can know them if you could come in here. >>You weould know that if you can come here.But The Weaknesses of Koreans are Greed and Success for living mostly.>>But the weakness of Koreans is being greedy for success mostly for a living. We fight each other to win since kindergarten( 4~7) in competition. >>We fight each other since kindergarten to win (4-7) a competition.And we become elementary schoolchild. fight, win, achieve. trample. >>When we become Elementary school students, we fight, win, achieve and trample.I have educated them in Korea\'s teachers. >>I have been educated by Korean teachers. We must win, have to eliminate, and should trample. >>CorrectAlways Learned at school.>> I always learned at school.I didn\'t know that i had done them and it\'s the ture i believed until 26. >>I didn\'t know what I have done was true until I was 26.It\'s a sad stories but exactly it\'s reality in Korea. >>It\'s a sad story but it\'s exactly thew reality in Korea.so I don\'t like Korea\'s Education System. >>CorrectI went to school and finished military service. >>CorrectI\'m 26 years old. >>Correct

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