Nov.13.2011.

2011-11-14 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

학생이 쓴 원문

I woke up all of a sudden. I stared a watch however i couldn't obviously see it. What time did it take a few minutes? I can clearly see a watch before long. And then,I was walking to refrigerator. But,I felt strange when i was caught a bottle of vinegar. (I normally drunk some vinegar to health) There misted up around the bottle. I don't know why there misted up with drop of water. And then,I checked all doors which the others two doors couldn't find something weird. At that time,I found the matter that begetable cell unclose. So,There was misted up. I asked my parents who my father answered. Manybe I forgot to close the door at night. I answered. It's ok those who would forget something. So I felt sad that my parents or my brother will die someday. And i will die someday. I looked for spicy food harms. It cause seborrheic dermatitis ,face a read candle and gastritic. But I don't wanna care it because it's your eating habit. Enjoy life.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름],       Thanks for this composition. I\'m so happy to receive a one from you. I\'m so grateful also for youre concern over my health. The information you searched are very helpful. Take care! See you later! -T.Verna-   I woke up all of a sudden. >>CorrectI stared a watch however i couldn\'t obviously see it.>>I started to watch however, I couldn\'t obviously see it.What time did it take a few minutes?>>What time did it start? How many minutes did it take?I can clearly see a watch before long. >>I can clearly watch it before.And then,I was walking to the refrigerator.>>CorrectBut,I felt strange when i was caught a bottle of vinegar. >>But, I felt a little strange when I got the bottle of vinegar.(I normally drunk some vinegar to health)>>( I normally drink some vinegar for health purposes.)There misted up around the bottle. >>It misted up around the bottle.)I don\'t know why there misted up with drop of water.>>I don\'t know why it misted up with drop of water.And then,I checked all doors which the others two doors couldn\'t find something weird.>>And then, I checked all the doors  even the other two doors  but couldn\'t find something weird.At that time,I found the matter that begetable cell unclose. >>At that time, I found that the problem was the vegetable\' s cell was unclosed.So,There was misted up.>>So, it was misted up.I asked my parents who my father answered. >>I asked my parents ten my father answered.Manybe I forgot to close the door at night. >>Maybe, I forgot to  close the foor last night.I answered. >>CorrectIt\'s ok those who would forget something. >>It\'s ok to forget something,So I felt sad that my parents or my brother will die someday. >>CorrectAnd I will die someday.>>CorrectI looked for spicy food harms.>>CorrectIt cause seborrheic dermatitis ,face a read candle and gastritic. >>It causes seborrheic dermatitis, red on the face and gastritis.But I don\'t wanna care it because it\'s your eating habit.>>CorrectEnjoy life. >>Correct

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