Nov. 16. 2011.

2011-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Lara

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I listened our lesson last day. I often listend to music during studying. You know that Music is Broccoli you too. I listened to instrument music. You said before. Your religion is Christian. Maybe Go to Church on every sunday morning. I know I feel kind of joy. When I was in Church representative young people. I felt a little sad. Many people go to Church But They are individual different reasons for going there. I had many meeting with executives for them and to adapt. So far as i'm concerned, i'm not all right. But i learned alot of religious works there. If i could speak Enlgish like Korean.i'll help you useful instance. in fact.I tell you. Many people are good appearance but they have almost illness of mind. or to recover them. It's hard to recover simply. It's insufficient more than urgent. Naturally, it's good we had alot of things. But Kings in old times died The reason that they had many good foods. so We have to know it. throw away greedy and fortune.

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Hi [이름]!!!  I really love going to church because that is a place where I can be alone and have a solemn time with our Him. I pray and I pray a lot even if I don\'t go to church often. I really agree with you that most people who are going to church have different purpose or reason of going there. They really look good but they have bad thinking towards others. And I don\'t like that either.  Let\'s talk more about this later. Take care.   I listened our lesson last day. >> I listened to our lesson the other day.I often listend to music during studying. >> I often listen to music while studying.You know that Music is Broccoli you too. >> You should know the music of Broccoli.I listened to instrument music. >> I listen to instrumental music.You said before. Your religion is Christian. >> You told me before that you\'re a Christian.Maybe Go to Church on every sunday morning. >> Maybe you go to church every Sunday morning.I know I feel kind of joy. When I was in Church representative young people. >> I know I felt a kind of joy when I was a church representative for young people.I felt a little sad. Many people go to Church But They are individual different reasons for going there. >> I fell a little sad because many peoplpe go to church but they have different reasons for going there.I had many meeting with executives for them and to adapt. >> I had many meetings with executives.So far as i\'m concerned, i\'m not all right. >> As far as I\'m concern, I\'m not alright.But i learned alot of religious works there. >> But I learned a lot of religious works there.If i could speak Enlgish like Korean.i\'ll help you useful instance. >>  If I could speak English well like I can in using the Korean language, I\'ll help you about some useful situation.in fact.I tell you. >> In fact I will tell you.Many people are good appearance but they have almost illness of mind. or to recover them. >> Many people have good appearance but they have sick mind.It\'s hard to recover simply. >> It\'s simply hard to recover.It\'s insufficient more than urgent. Naturally, it\'s good we had alot of things. >> It\'s sufficient more than urgent, it\'s good we have a lot of things.But Kings in old times died The reason that they had many good foods. >> But the Kings from the old times died because they had many good foods.so We have to know it. throw away greedy and fortune. >> So we have to know how to throw away greediness and longing for great fortune.

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