NOV.17.2011.
학생이 쓴 원문
Time is moving fast.I have been studying here for about a month.
I don't know my condition but i've got some daring to speak.
You told me before,I have to endure studying.
Many people tried to persuade other people for their pursuing.
It's dangerous if i have to persuade them to do carefully.
What kind of foods are famous in your nation.
I Know philippines Noodle is famous in my nation,
I haven't try it yet.
I love chichken.i have about 3 chickens a week with mother from delivery.
I did internet shopping yesterday.i bought some clothes and cosmetics.
I prefer No brand to the brand.exactly i don't care particular brand.I don't know alot of brand.But my wrist watch is some expensive.
Many Korea women want to have alot of money they don't even have dreaming in the future.
I can know people concept during some talking.
I can even earn lower money and just live.
I don't like greedy and success, i have been experienced alot of Leader's position.
I don't want to be authority.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!!! As time passes, I can really know you better as a person. I think you are really a very simple man with a very simple ideology about life and I truly appreciate you with that. I hope you\'ll stay as simple as you are now. I\'m really impressed with the way you write your compositions nowadays so just continue growing. Talk to you soon.
Time is moving fast.I have been studying here for about a month.
>> Correct I don\'t know my condition but i\'ve got some daring to speak.
>> I don\'t know my condition but I\'ve got some courage to speak. (Reminder: The word \'daring\' you used in your sentence [이름] is not an appropriate term. The word \'daring is a noun so we\'d rather use another word in an adjective form. )You told me before,I have to endure studying.>> Correct
Many people tried to persuade other people for their pursuing.
>> Many people tried to persuade other people for them to pursue their goals/dreams.It\'s dangerous if i have to persuade them to do carefully.
>> It\'s dangerous if I will persuade them to do it carefully.What kind of foods are famous in your nation.
>> What kind of foods are famous in your country?I Know philippines Noodle is famous in my nation,
>> I know that Philippine noodle is famous in my country.I haven\'t try it yet.
>> I haven\'t tried it yet.I love chichken.i have about 3 chickens a week with mother from delivery.
>> I love chicken. I can eat chicken 3 times a week with my mother and having it delivered at home.I did internet shopping yesterday.i bought some clothes and cosmetics.
>> Correct (Reminder: [이름], be mindful that everytime you use the pronoun \'I\', make sure that you will capitalize it. kk )I prefer No brand to the brand.exactly i don\'t care particular brand.I don\'t know alot of brand.But my wrist watch is some expensive.
>> I prefer buying no brand products. I don\'t exactly care about a particular brand. I don\'t much about branded products, but my watch is quite expensive.Many Korea women want to have alot of money they don\'t even have dreaming in the future.
>> Many Korean women want to have a lot of money but they don\'t have a dream in the future.I can know people concept during some talking.
>> I can know an individuals\' perception by just talking with them.I can even earn lower money and just live.
>> I can earn a small amount of money and still live.I don\'t like greedy and success, i have been experienced alot of Leader\'s position.
>> I don\'t like to be greedy and successful. I have been experienced a lot of that idea from our leaders.I don\'t want to be authority.
>> I don\'t to be in authority.
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