Nov.18.2011.
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi. Techer Lara.
Today is a happy Friday.
I reviewed our class a moment ago.
I listened to my voice but it was like a kid, and i found my habit while talking.
I was nervous a little, and i tended to be excited when i talk.
I guess, you have some stress becuase of my voice.
It's not a good voice to speak english.
I heard many compliments about my voice from other people.
But my English Voice is not good.
I knew it through review.
I was surprised that i received my clothes.
These days,It's fierce on the internet shop.
I guess they should make another strategy that's shipping.
I received them in a day.
Maybe It's companies's differentiation to sell more.
If i could recommended some books, i'll recommend that The book is Demian.
Author Herman Hesse.I guess you knew him.
I read all his books when i was in University.
But I can't remember their storyline. But only one thing i remember the Demian.
Becuase you are Christian,I recommend it carefully.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!!! Honestly, your voice is so cool to listen to. So don\'t worry about your voice, I never had stress in listening to your voice. I like it!!! And I\'m always looking forward in hearing you more each day. KK Talk to you later then.
Hi. Techer Lara.>> Hi Teacher Lara.Today is a happy Friday.>> CorrectI reviewed our class a moment ago.
>> CorrectI listened to my voice but it was like a kid, and i found my habit while talking.
>> I listened to my voice but I sound like a kidI was nervous a little, and i tended to be excited when i talk.>> I was a bit nervous and I tend to sound excited when I talk.I guess, you have some stress becuase of my voice.
>> I guess you\'re having some stress because of my voice.It\'s not a good voice to speak english.
>> It\'s not a good voice for English speaking.I heard many compliments about my voice from other people.>> CorrectBut my English Voice is not good.>> But my English voice is not good.I knew it through review.>> I knew it through a review.I was surprised that i received my clothes.
>> I was surprised that I already recieved my clothes.These days,It\'s fierce on the internet shop.
>> These days it\'s a competition in online shopping.I guess they should make another strategy that\'s shipping.
>> I guess they should make another strategy in terms of their shipping.I received them in a day.
>> CorrectMaybe It\'s companies\'s differentiation to sell more.>> Maybe it is the companys\' variation techniques to sell more.If i could recommended some books, i\'ll recommend that The book is Demian.
>> If I could recommend some books, I\'ll recommend the book of Demian.Author Herman Hesse.I guess you knew him.>> The author is Herman Hesse, I guess you know him.
I read all his books when i was in University. >> I read all his books when I was in university.
But I can\'t remember their storyline. But only one thing i remember the Demian.>> But I can\'t remember their storyline, there\'s only one thing I can remember about Demian.Becuase you are Christian,I recommend it carefully.
>> Because you are a Christian, I recommend it to you.
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