Nov.29.2011.
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Teacher.
Nice to meet you.
It's my first composition so What did you do on last night?
Nowadays,I went to conversation school like the machine.
I didn't told you about my first rank.
My first rank was second lieutenant in military.
We called diamond that The shape is similar to diamond.
But I don't know about you.
Your family, sibling, your boyfriend.
I wonder them.
I'm studying a morning class to other teacher.
Her name is Lara teacher.
She is very kind and in depth woman.
But I don't know about your attitude. kk... I want to talk about personal questions.
If you were bothered,Just start to Book.
Anyway see you later.
This question is from my freetalking book.
How old were you when you had your first date?
Well, i can't remember my first date.but i did it.
The most intense date was in my university.
When I was a firstman, i went to a club in the university,so I fell in love at first sight to one-girl.
She had boyfriend who was my best friend.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
Thank you for writing your composition for me.
I am always very open in sharing my life so don't worry I am not really bothered.
I have three older sisters and one younger brother.
They are all married and with kids.
I am the only one left single.
I live with my parents these days but I used to live in my apartment.
-Tiny^0^
Hi Teacher.
>>CORRECTNice to meet you.
>>CORRECTIt\'s my first composition so What did you do on last night?
>>CORRECT
>> It\'s my first composition so. What did you do on last night?
Nowadays,I went to conversation school like the machine.
>> Nowadays, I go to conversation school like an automated answering machine.
I didn\'t told you about my first rank.
>> I didn\'t tell you about my first rank.
My first rank was second lieutenant in military.
>>CORRECTWe called diamond that The shape is similar to diamond.
>> We call it diamond because the shape is similar to diamond.
But I don\'t know about you.
>>CORRECTYour family, sibling, your boyfriend. I wonder them.
>> I wonder about your family, siblings, and your boyfriend.
I\'m studying a morning class to other teacher.
>> I\'m studying a morning class with other teacher.
Her name is Lara teacher.
>> Her name is Lara.
She is very kind and in depth woman.
>>CORRECTBut I don\'t know about your attitude. kk...
>>CORRECT
I want to talk about personal questions.
>>CORRECTIf you were bothered, Just start to Book.
>> If you were bothered, just start with the book.
Anyway see you later.
>>CORRECTThis question is from my freetalking book.
>>CORRECTHow old were you when you had your first date?
>>CORRECTWell, i can\'t remember my first date. but i did it.
>> Well, I can\'t remember my first date but I did it.
The most intense date was in my university.
>>CORRECTWhen I was a firstman, i went to a club in the university,so I fell in love at first sight to one-girl.
>> When I was a freshman, I went to a club in the university, so I fell in love at first sight to one girl.
She had boyfriend who was my best friend.
>>CORRECT
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