Nov.4.2011.
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi verna
It's friday.
i heard to my father.
he went to your nation for a year ago.
he siad, most of filipino have the Catholic Church.
how did you go there?
My nation is Catholic 10.9, Church 18.3, Buddhism 22.8, No religion 46.5 percentage.
Korean don't like religions. i think The reason because of Church.
Ministers have frequently occured sexual molestation, and Extort contribution.
we can't never love the Church.
I guess, maybe i don't go The reason in that place.
when i was representative about The Church.
i always felt shame. because my nation ignore the Church.
Why were they ignoring about Church.
because of Ministers.
Most of ministers have greed like ordinary korean people.
it's a big matter.
Sexual molestation and extort contribution. their life think and
those who can be sure them.
i'm sorry about my nation matters.
i like discussions, But i don't have English speaking skill.
i believe i can fluently use English sometime,
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!!! Religion is a very serious subject matter in an ordinary discussion. We all have different and own beliefs about religion, opinions about the practices, and teachings. But we have to respect each other and try to understand the choices each of us made.
Hi verna>> Hi Verna,It\'s friday.>> Correct i heard to my father.
>> I heard this from my father.he went to your nation for a year ago.>> He went to your country about a year ago.he siad, most of filipino have the Catholic Church.
>> He said that most Filipinos are Catholics.how did you go there?>> How did you go there?My nation is Catholic 10.9, Church 18.3, Buddhism 22.8, No religion 46.5 percentage.>> My country is compose of 10.9% Catholics, 22.8% Buddhism and 46.5% aethiest.Korean don\'t like religions. i think The reason because of Church.
>> Koreans don\'t like to have a religion and I think the reason is because of the Church.Ministers have frequently occured sexual molestation, and Extort contribution.>> Ministers are frequesnt subject of crime such as sexual molestation and extortion.we can\'t never love the Church.
>> We can\'t and never appreciate the Church.I guess, maybe i don\'t go The reason in that place.>> I guess, maybe that\'s the reason I don\'t go in that place.when i was representative about The Church.
>> When I was representing the Church,i always felt shame. because my nation ignore the Church.
>> I always feel shame because my nation ignores the Church.Why were they ignoring about Church because of Ministers.>>The reason why they are ignoring the Church because of the ministers.Most of ministers have greed like ordinary korean people.
>> Most of the ministers are greedy like some ordinary Korean people.it\'s a big matter.>> It\'s a big issue.Sexual molestation and extort contribution. their life think and those who can be sure them.>> Sexual molestation and extortion affect their thinking about life and those who believe in them.i\'m sorry about my nation matters.
>> I\'m sorry about my nation\'s matters.i like discussions, But i don\'t have English speaking skill.
>> I like to discuss about this issue but I don\'t have good English speaking skill.i believe i can fluently use English sometime,
>> I believe tha I can be a fluent Eglish speaker in time.
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